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How do these fit into your 2^nd paper?

I will be able to receive a better grade if my paper has less grammatical errors and also and if I make sure my words are clear and precise, I don’t want to leave my readers in a guessing game. I can use Fragment to better help me grade my own paper because I know that often times I do have fragments of  a sentence, so I’m working on that, in combining some sentences to make it complete. A way I have learned to find a fragment is when reading it, if you don’t feel that you are getting the full story. Or if the sentence leaves you confused or asking questions after you read it. I really have to make sure that I don’t fuse my sentences. Most of the time I am pretty good about using punctuation to break up my sentence, but it does happen to slip sometimes. To avoid comma slices, I just might need to add more punctuation to the sentence. But, also make sure it sounds right and makes sense to my reader. Over all I will just make sure that I have lot of people correct proof read my paper. I will also proof read my essay, just to make sure that it fits all these standards. 

Drafting Exercise

BLOCK FORMAT

Role: To give students inspiration and self-confidence

Name of Teacher #1: Mr. Escalante

Teacher #2: Ms. Laughlin

Positive/ negative: both the teachers are positive examples

A. Characteristic 1 Mr. Escalante has: Strict but respected

                1. Strict late policy: when Angel came in late because of his grandmother

                2. Strict with Rules: Always made sure his students were in their seats and working, if his students didn’t have a seat, then he would find them a seat for the next day.

                3. By this he gains respect: By speaking in his student’s first language and also by involving himself in their lives.

B. Characteristic 2: Passion for Teaching

                1. Work after school: taught parents English after school, because of his strong dedication to teach it lead him to heartache.

                2. He took his students life experiences and the things they were interested in to bring they to participate in the class.

                3. Help outside of class: Worked during the summer to teach math, when it seemed to be a hundred degrees in his classroom.

C. Characteristic 3: High standards for Students 

1.       The late policy was a standard he had, if his students were late he would send them out of the classroom for that day, they were not welcomed back in. He also expected them to be successful

2.       Knows potential of individual: he believed in them, even though these students didn’t want to be at school at first, on the first day they didn’t even care to sit in a seat, he taught them to be so much more than what society thought they should be.

3.       Pushes students to that standard: he made them sign an information/ agreement slip

D. Characteristic 1 is Ms. Laughlin: Strict but respected

                1. If students were late to her class she would ask them to sit outside the door, then when she got a chance she would go outside and talk to them about it.

                2. Students were disrespectful she would “put them in their place.” She would do this busy using intelligent word that the student didn’t understand.

                3. She was also very kind about student’s home lives, if a student came into the classroom in tears, she would take them out to ask them what was wrong.

E. Characteristic 2: Passion for teaching

1. She will stay in during lunch to grade papers, if I wanted to come into her class to work on something during her lunch time, she’d let me.

2. If a student’s needs a paper proof read, she will proof read it, many times I have asked her to proof read my essays of assignments, and she will return them quickly.

3. If there is a problem with a student’s schedule, she will drop what she is doing to help them with it.

F. Characteristic 3: High standards for students

                1. Mark Davidson, she would push him to do work in her classroom, he never would work for any other teacher. In any other classroom but, he would do his work for Laughlin.

                2. She knew each person needed to do work on in class, their weakness

                3. She truly believed in her students, I never felt that I couldn’t do it in her class. She would tell us that if you don’t believe in yourself, you will always know that I believe in you, until you can believe in yourself.

Conclusion:

First Sentence: although they both teach very different subjects and they may use different examples when they teach Mr. Escalante and Ms. Laughlin are very similar.

They both show a love and passion for their students and their jobs. They are both very dedicated to their jobs, because of the passion that they have in their classroom and the interest they give into their students’ lives are the biggest reasons why Ms. Laughlin and Mr. Escalante and such good teachers.

Point by Point Format

Role: To give students inspiration and self-confidence

Name of Teacher #1: Mr. Escalante

Teacher #2: Ms. Laughlin

Positive/ negative: both the teachers are positive examples

A.      Characteristics of both: Strict but respected

1.       Late Policy: they will tell their students to leave if they are late.

2.       Strict with Rules: Always made sure his student were in their seats and working

B.      Passion for teaching:

1.       Ms. Laughlin truly believed in her students

2.       Mr. Escalante helped outside of class: Worked during the summer to teach math

C.      High standards for students:

1.       Ms. Laughlin knew what each person needed to work on in class their weakness. 

2.       Mr. Escalante made his students sign an information/ agreement slip, he also asked to work during the summer.

Conclusion:  First Sentence: although they both teach very different subjects and they may use different examples when they teach Mr. Escalante and Ms. Laughlin are very similar.

They both show a love and passion for their students and their jobs. They are both very dedicated to their jobs, because of the passion that they have in their classroom and the interest they give into their students’ lives are the biggest reasons why Ms. Laughlin and Mr. Escalante and such good teachers.

Organizational Format                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                                

            Introduction: How they are different:

1.      They both teach different subjects. One math and the other English.

2.      The environment they teach in. One teaches in a very poor area while the other teachers in an area that is very red neck.

A.      Characteristics of both: Strict but respected

3.       Late Policy: they will tell their students to leave if they are late.

4.       Strict with Rules: Always made sure his student were in their seats and working

B.      Passion for teaching:

3.       Ms. Laughlin truly believed in her students

4.       Mr. Escalante helped outside of class: Worked during the summer to teach math

C.      High standards for students:

3.       Ms. Laughlin knew what each person needed to work on in class their weakness. 

4.       Mr. Escalante made his students sign an information/ agreement slip; he also asked to work during the summer.

Conclusion: By staying after school, by involving themselves in their students’ lives, this is an example of how both show love and passion for their students and their jobs. They are both very dedicated to their jobs and they show interest in their students’ lives, this is the biggest reasons why Ms. Laughlin and Mr. Escalante and such good teachers.  

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                Some of the few ways that Mr. Escalate and my former high school teacher Ms. Laughlin are different, is they both taught in a very different environments Mr. Escalate taught in a very poor area with lots of theft and gangs. While Ms. Laughlin taught in a more red neck type area, with less gangs and theft and more dirt biking and four wheeling.  They also taught two very opposite subjects Mr. Escalate taught Math. While Ms. Laughlin taught English. Although they had their differences they both had very many aspects in common. The biggest role Mr. Escalante and Ms. Laughlin played in their students’ lives were giving them inspiration and with that self-confidence.  

            Both Mr. Escalate and Ms. Laughlin and are very strict with their students, they expect respect and if the students don’t show them that respect, then they treat that student the same way that student treats them. If the student is respectful to the teacher then the teacher will give that student respect back and also more privileges. For example, one time during class one of Mr. Escalates students flipped him off during class instead of taking this as an insult Mr. Escalate took it as a challenge. “Oh so you’re the figure man well I am that figure man two.” After this statement, Mr. Escalate then proceeded to show this student how to do multiplication on his fingers. When Ms. Laughlin is being disrespected, if the student is talking back, she will use intelligent words that the student doesn’t understand to make sure that student is not disrespectful again. The other students in the class will laugh because the student getting put in their place, so to speak is stubbing over their words not sure how to reply. Even though the majority of the class doesn’t understand exactly what she is saying either.

            Another way I have seen these teachers gain respect is have a strict late policy, Ms. Laughlin in forces the rules as well as Mr. Escalate. If a student was late to her class she would ask them to wait outside of the classroom until she had a chance to talk to them. One time when one of Mr. Escalates students were late he asked him to leave his classroom as well although, he didn’t want them to come back into his class at all that day, if that student was late. Often time though, in Mr. Escalante’s class students wanted to be there, they truly felt satisfaction in learning and being is his classroom. By being strict with their students, they gained respect through respect they were able to push their students to become successful.

            Another way Escalate and Laughlin are similar is they both have high standards for their students, they know what they can become. The great things that they can do with their life, this is why they will push their students to their full potential. They also know what that full potential is for each individual that comes into their classroom. Ms. Laughlin proved this with a student in my English class, his name was Mark Davidson. I never knew a boy who could get away with merely doing nothing almost on an everyday basis in class. Most of the teachers at my high school gave up long ago in trying to convince him to do work. Although, Laughlin on the other hand had not given up on the challenge, I don’t know how she did it or the exact day that it all changed. But, I do know one thing. Every day that Mark wouldn’t do his work. Laughlin would come over and sit with him and talk to him about why he wasn’t doing his work. Or I guess she would just talk to him, I really don’t know, but whatever she did, she was a miracle worker. One day I looked over at Mark and he was working and he was not just looking at his work and faking it. He was sincerely engaged in his work truly thinking and working on his class work. This is proof of Mr. Escalates words were he states, “Students will raise to the level of expectation, Senor Molina.” Mr. Escalante proved his words to be true many times. He took a classroom of students that appeared that they didn’t want to achieve anything in their life, to students that didn’t want anything other than to gain more knowledge in school. These students started to fight for their education. When the whole class was claimed to have cheated, the whole class started to get fired up about it. They all became very upset, although they were upset this still did not stop them. They continued to work, to study, they all choice to take the test again to prove that they did not cheat. They studied almost all night, the night before the test, then they all in the end passed the test. Since Mr. Escalante and Laughlin both showed their students that they truly believed in them, this helped their students believe in themselves.

            Mr. Escalante wanted to teach, he and Ms. Laughlin truly want to teach their students. They care for them and they want them to be successful. Mr. Escalante was not supposed to teach math in the beginning he actually came to teach a computers class, but because the school was so poor they couldn’t afford computers, this showed his dedication to the school even before he was dedicated to his student’s. Mr. Escalante showed dedication to his students, because he taught them in the summer, where he was only given an extremely humid classroom to teach in with no air conditioning, he taught them before school, after school. He took time way from his family at times just to teach his student’s. He spent his time asking his students about their lives, to get to know them on a personal level. Not just to look at them as another head in his classroom. This showed that he had a passion for his job that he loved what he did, being a teacher.  

            Ms. Laughlin also shows similar dedication to her student’s, she will take the time out of her day to read extra papers the student has written for another class. To correct it, to proof read it. She also will ask students about their home life. If one of her students come into the class distressed and in tears, she will take the chance to talk to them in the hallway. To mentor with them, Laughlin will let you come to her with a problem with your schedule, any problem that you may have she will take it into her hands and handle it quickly and effectively. Of course this is if you have shown her respect in her classroom, but often times she will even show this kindness to students that haven’t always treated her the best they should have.

            Since both these teachers have shown their students so much love and respect by truly caring about them, this has greatly reflected who their students have been as people. I can speak first hand that I would not be the student that I am today if Ms. Laughlin didn’t tell me on a weekly bases how she knew that I could do it. Telling me that I am intelligent, that I can accomplish the tasks she has asked of me, to trust in myself. This is much like Stand and Deliver when I can see that Mr. Escalante’s students gained a greater hope and appreciation for their lives. He set a fire within each of his students to work for the things they desired in their life. I think that is the greatest lesson a teacher and teach their students to have self-confidence and to give inspiration to their students.

My Thesis Statement: My Paragraph

Thesis: The biggest role Mr. Escalante and Ms. Laughlin played in their students’ lives was giving them inspiration and with that self-confidence.  

The Paragraphy with more details:

            Another way Escalate and Laughlin are similar is they both have high standards for their students, they know what they can become. The great things that they can do with their life, this is why they will push their students to their full potential. They also know what that full potential is for each individual that comes into their classroom. Ms. Laughlin proved this with a student in my English class, his name was Mark Davidson. I never knew a boy who could get away with merely doing nothing almost on an everyday basis in class. Most of the teachers at my high school gave up long ago in trying to convince him to do work. Although, Laughlin on the other hand had not given up on the challenge, I don’t know how she did it or the exact day that it all changed. But, I do know one thing. Every day that Mark wouldn’t do his work. Laughlin would come over and sit with him and talk to him about why he wasn’t doing his work. Or I guess she would just talk to him, I really don’t know, but whatever she did, she was a miracle worker. One day I looked over at Mark and he was working and he was not just looking at his work and faking it. He was sincerely engaged in his work truly thinking and working on his class work. This is proof of Mr. Escalates words were he states, “Students will raise to the level of expectation, Senor Molina.” Mr. Escalante proved his words to be true many times. He took a classroom of students that appeared that they didn’t want to achieve anything in their life, to students that didn’t want anything other than to gain more knowledge in school. These students started to fight for their education. When the whole class was claimed to have cheated, the whole class started to get fired up about it. They all became very upset, although they were upset this still did not stop them. They continued to work, to study, they all choice to take the test again to prove that they did not cheat. They studied almost all night, the night before the test, then they all in the end passed the test. Since Mr. Escalante and Laughlin both showed their students that they truly believed in them, this helped their students believe in themselves.

Which Two Teachers and Why?

     I chose Ms. Laughlin a past high school English teacher of mine and Mr. Escalante to compare as both very good teachers. I chose these two teachers because they both had a great impact in their students’ lives. They both have inspired their students to be and do something more with their lives. Their students have been able to have great success and inspiration after that class. My personally situation was Ms. Laughlin put a fire with in me to me my own personal motivation. Ms. Laughlin really gave me self-confidence, she believed in me the whole time I was in her class truly believed in me and that lead me to believe in myself. 
I will write how Mr. Escalante was similar to Ms. Laughlin in the fact that he also gave his students self-motivation, you can see this because when his students had worked so hard to pass the test and when the school board thought they had cheated. His students started to fall downhill. Before the cheating situation they were feeling like they were on cloud nine. You could see the passion in his students faces, like the time that he didn’t let that boy into his class because he was late with his sick grandmother, he was crushed and he was pleading with Mr. Escalante to let him stay for the class you could see it in his eyes that he truly wanted to stay and learn.

Mona Lisa Smiles Notes

Katharine came to Wellsey because she wanted to make a difference. Every young woman knew everything about the art. They seem super bored with the teacher and are totally over achievers. Some are pretty dang rude half way through the first class the girls got up and left. These girls are harsh and hard on their teachers.

So Ms. Watson pulls out some pictures that are not in the textbook. Ms. Watson is making these young woman think for themselves and think outside the box for say. The girls feel that if Katherine is not married and doesn’t have kids then she is not successful.

The young women go to a class that teaches you how to be a wife and how to deal with different situations. Some girls admire Ms. Watson while other girls hate the way she teaches; she wants the girls to form their own opinion.

Katherine doesn’t understand why these girls are gaining so much education just to be a stay at home mom. These girls love to gossip. Some of these young women seem very lady like but really are not. Ms. Watson is pushing the girls to go against the grain to go against what the average person in that area is doing.

Everyone assumes that the girls want to get married it is more expected then what I think all of the woman want. They think that it is their duty that they were born to fulfill. Some of these girls want so badly to change the way they are expected to do things. To change that if they don’t do something a set way, then they should be looked down upon.

Most of the people admire her teaching, but some others really despise the way she is doing things.

I like that her students still have the guts to stand up to her whether it be against her or with her. Whether if it is her way or not!

A lot of the people’s lives at not that they are not all that they are cracked up to be. Lots of husbands cheated and lots of people lie. They all pretend that everything in their life is wonderful and perfect, but the fact is it really isn’t perfect. “Not everything is as it seems.” That is to true, especially in this story.

The young women are finally getting it. They are speaking about the art, stating their true opinions on it. She has inspired these young women to be who they want. What they want to be and to support themselves in whatever they might want to do. She taught her students to “live the world threw her own eyes.”

Similarity/Differences with Watson and Escalante

Ms. Watson and Escalante and similar in the fact that they push their students beyond the text books or the average expectations that other teachers have for their students. They are similar they are both very strict with their students. They both have the school board kind of against them, in the fact that they do things a little bit different than the other teachers. The school didn’t like Mr. Escalante because the teachers didn’t like him pushing his students to do Calculus while Ms. Watson wasn’t liked for inspiring the young woman to form their own opinions about things. Both Mr. Escalante and Ms. Watson have a connection with their students outside of the school setting. They both care for their students enough to listen to about their home life. They both fought for their students by going against the school board and telling them how they truly feel about the school.

They are different because Mr. Escalante taught his students with more humor and Ms. Watson teaches her students more seriously. She still jokes with them a bit, but she is not as cut loose as Mr. Escalante. Ms. Watson if very self-dependent, and not that Mr. Escalante wasn’t self-dependent, but it is a different time so he didn’t have to show his self-dependence as much as Ms. Watson did.

and Escalante and similar in the fact that they push their students beyond the text books or the average expectations that other teachers have for their students. They are similar they are both very strict with their students. They both have the school board kind of against them, in the fact that they do things a little bit different than the other teachers. The school didn’t like Mr. Escalante because the teachers didn’t like him pushing his students to do Calculus while Ms. Watson wasn’t liked for inspiring the young woman to form their own opinions about things. Both Mr. Escalante and Ms. Watson have a connection with their students outside of the school setting. They both care for their students enough to listen to about their home life. They both fought for their students by going against the school board and telling them how they truly feel about the school.

They are different because Mr. Escalante taught his students with more humor and Ms. Watson teaches her students more seriously. She still jokes with them a bit, but she is not as cut loose as Mr. Escalante. Ms. Watson if very self-dependent, and not that Mr. Escalante wasn’t self-dependent, but it is a different time so he didn’t have to show his self-dependence as much as Ms. Watson did.